If you\'re given a chance to go to Vietnam again, what activities would you like to do there?

2023-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

I have drawbacks while I traveling in Vietnam. There was 2 hours time difference between the two countries. I walked barefoot in the early every morning beside the beach. Many people were enjoying the sea by swimming and other exercises before sunrise because of a heat wave in the daytime. I thought I would swim with a local person the next morning, but I couldn\'t do it because it required a lot of courage. Secondly, beautiful beaches are always located within walking distance, so I was about to learn surfing. However, I didn\'t learn it due to the expensive price. Lastly, I met a social worker from Germany who lived in Vietnam after retirement. He was cleaning the beach by himself to keep the earth clean for many years. His wife retired as a violinist in France and he was already broadcasted for a heart-warming story in Vietnam. To be continued.

강사 첨삭

Good day, Sir [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


I have drawbacks while I traveling in Vietnam. 
>> I have drawbacks while I was traveling in Vietnam. 
There was 2 hours time difference between the two countries. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There was a 2-hour difference between the two countries.
I walked barefoot in the early every morning beside the beach. 
>> CORRECT!
Many people were enjoying the sea by swimming and other exercises before sunrise because of a heat wave in the daytime. 
>> Many people were enjoying the sea by swimming and other exercises before sunrise because of the heat wave in the daytime. 
I thought I would swim with a local person the next morning, but I couldn\'t do it because it required a lot of courage. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I thought I would swim with the locals the next morning, but I couldn\'t do it because it required a lot of courage. 
Secondly, beautiful beaches are always located within walking distance, so I was about to learn surfing. 
>> CORRECT!
However, I didn\'t learn it due to the expensive price. 
>> CORRECT!
Lastly, I met a social worker from Germany who lived in Vietnam after retirement. 
>> CORRECT!
He was cleaning the beach by himself to keep the earth clean for many years. 
>> CORRECT!
His wife retired as a violinist in France and he was already broadcasted for a heart-warming story in Vietnam. 
>> CORRECT!
To be continued.
>> CORRECT!

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