" IF YOU'RE WORRIED ABOUT GAINING WEIGHT, EAT MORE LOW-CALORIE VEGETABLES "

2018-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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I think that the number of people consider to manage body's weight. I'm also too. However, It's not easy to maintain good-looking body Because we might be exposed delicious foods in anywhere. Do you think so? I think that you're yes too. Personally, I like to eat delicious foods even if foods are too much sweet, salty and spicy Because I can feel to get rid of stress. On the other hand, I thought why I'm living my life. I can say that the reason is to eat foods. By eating prefered foods, I have been getting so happy. By the way, those foods are useally hign calorie so the disease always is followed to us. So in my opinion, anyone wants to eat delicious foods which are strong taste. Regularly need to exercise. But anyone doesn't like to exercise if like to eat foods. They will regret there life in near future. I want to say that exercise will save longer life to us.

강사 첨삭

I think that the number of people consider to manage body\'s weight.

>> I think that the number of people considering to manage their body\'s weight is increasing.
 I\'m also too. However, It\'s not easy to maintain good-looking body

>> I\'m also too. However, It\'s not easy to maintain a good-looking body.
 Because we might be exposed delicious foods in anywhere.

>> Because we are exposed to delicious foods everywhere.
 Do you think so? 

>> Don\'t you think so?
 I think that you\'re yes too.

>> I think that you\'ll say yes too.
 Personally, I like to eat delicious foods even if foods are too much sweet, salty and spicy

>> Personally, I like to eat delicious food even if it\'s too sweet, salty or spicy.
 Because I can feel to get rid of stress. On the other hand, I thought why I\'m living my life.

>> Because I can get rid of my stress. On the other hand, I also think of the reason I\'m living my life.
 I can say that the reason is to eat foods. By eating prefered foods, I have been getting so happy.

>> I can say that the reason is to eat food. By eating preferred food, has been making me happy.
 By the way, those foods are useally hign calorie so the disease always is followed to us.

>> By the way, those food are high calorie food so disease related to them follow us too.
 So in my opinion, anyone wants to eat delicious foods which are strong taste.

>> So in my opinion, Everyone wants to eat delicious food with strong taste.
 Regularly need to exercise. But anyone doesn\'t like to exercise if like to eat foods.

>> We regularly need exercise. But most of us don\'t like to exercise.
 They will regret there life in near future. I want to say that exercise will save longer life to us.

>> They will regret it in the near future. I want to say that exercise will save us to have a longer life.

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