If you retire in the future, what do you think would your life be like?

2021-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I will often exercise. so I will travel with my savings money with health body and enjoy my free time. and I want to meet my friends who I couldn’t meet becasue of my work and talk freely at a cafe. and I want if my parents lives daily will eat meal that I cook together.

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Hi [이름]! ^^

Wow, that really does sound good. Thanks for sharing :)

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I will often exercise. so I will travel with my savings money with health body and enjoy my free time.

>> I will often exercise so that I can travel using my savings with a fit and healthy body. This way, I can enjoy my free time.

and I want to meet my friends who I couldn’t meet becasue of my work and talk freely at a cafe.

>> I want to meet my friends, that I don\'t often meet because of work, at the cafe to talk freely.

and I want if my parents lives daily will eat meal that I cook together.

>> I want to be with my parents as well to cook and eat meals together.

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