If you were a designer, how would you design the traditional clothes in your country and why?

2020-03-26 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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If i were a designer for hanbok, the traditional attire, i would made it comfortable to wear rather than fancy. The traditional composition of hanbok is complex. People have to put on many layers. So it is uncomfortable to move. Furthermore the skirts are longer then women\'s leg, they cannot help it but drag the skirts. Hanbok is considered as a fine dress, it is usually made from silk. So it looks very beautiful but is expensive That\'s why it cannot be an ordinary people\'s daily fashion. Those two things are the main reasons of their rare appearance. That\'s why i want to change about it. I would like to see it more often in ordinary street not only in big ceremonies as wedding day.

강사 첨삭

Hello Cho. Thank you for this. Come to think of it, it would be nice to see people wearing it more often.
- T. Beth
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If i were a designer for hanbok, the traditional attire, i would made it comfortable to wear rather than fancy.
>>>>  If I were a designer for hanbok, the traditional attire, I would make it comfortable to wear rather than fancy.    
The traditional composition of hanbok is complex. 
>>>>  correct      
People have to put on many layers. 
>>>>   correct     
So it is uncomfortable to move. 
>>>>  correct      
Furthermore the skirts are longer then women\'s leg, they cannot help it but drag the skirts.
>>>>  Furthermore, the skirts are longer than the women\'s legs, they cannot help but drag the skirts.      
Hanbok is considered as a fine dress, it is usually made from silk. 
>>>>  correct      
So it looks very beautiful but is expensive
>>>> correct       
That\'s why it cannot be an ordinary people\'s daily fashion.
>>>>  correct      
Those two things are the main reasons of their rare appearance.
>>>>   correct     
That\'s why i want to change about it. 
>>>> That\'s what I want to change about it.       
I would like to see it more often in ordinary street not only in big ceremonies as wedding day.
>>>>   I would like to see it more often in ordinary street not only in big ceremonies as a wedding day.     

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