If you were a politician, what political issues would you focus on?

2019-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

World economy is getting worse these days. Korea also have same problem regarding economic issues. Past politicians in the government were corrupted and the Ex-president has someone who was involved political issues and give a direct advice even though she is not a politician. Ex-president was impeached by citizens and we had a election to choose a new president. After that, new politician groups were opened from the conservative party to the progressive party. We expected that our economy would be boosted and no more corruption by politicians. Current administrators in the government are close with labor unions and tried to make a new law for them. I really welcomed to the things that our government did. However, many people have complained about government\'s policy, because the business of self-employed people is getting worse and people needed to pay more taxes according to their salary or income. I think that make sense.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! How are you doing? Thanks for sharing your opinions about this.
There is no perfect government. Government has always flaws. Corruption is everywhere.
Even our country faced the same problem. But nowadays our president is focused more on the people
not the country itself. He wants our country to be safer for the citizens. What I admire about your country
is rental policy for houses, transportation and technology. I think that these things should also be improved
in our country.
~~Teacher May~~
World economy is getting worse these days.
Korea also have same problem regarding economic issues.
>> CORRECT
Past politicians in the government were corrupted and the Ex-president has someone who was involved political issues and give a direct advice even though she is not a politician.
>> Past politicians corrupted the government and the former president has someone who was involved in political issues and gave a direct advice even though she is not a politician.
Ex-president was impeached by citizens and we had a election to choose a new president.
>> The former president was impeached by the citizens and we had to elect new president.
After that, new politician groups were opened from the conservative party to the progressive party.
>> CORRECT
We expected that our economy would be boosted and no more corruption by politicians.
>> 
We expected that our economy would be improved and no more corruption be occured.
Current administrators in the government are close with labor unions and tried to make a new law for them.
>> The c
urrent administrators in the government are close with the labor unions and tried to implement a new law.
I really welcomed to the things that our government did.
>> 
I really welcomed the things that our government did.
However, many people have complained about government\'s policy, because the business of self-employed people is getting worse and people needed to pay more taxes according to their salary or income.
>> 
However, many people have complained about the government\'s policies because the business of self-employed people is getting worse and people needed to pay more taxes based on their salary.
I think that make sense.
>> 
I think that makes sense.

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