If you were a song, what song would you be and why?

2021-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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I have not imagined which song I would be actually. But If I can be, I would like to be a song for people who feel tired and exhausted in their life. As I mentioned, I like to listen a music which has a comfort lyric. The reason why I like to hear is that sometimes I feel get a console and feel same as the people. I think a song is a magic of cure. As I am getting older, I think a life is not easy. I think a song is a good way to control our life. So If I can be a song, I want to whisper some nice words to people and makes feel be happy like a bed bracket in the winter season. This topic is very new and I have not thought about it in my life. I wish you understand what I want to say : )

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! Of course, I understand everything you said. You are really selfless because even in songs you still think of others\' welfare!-Faith-
I have not imagined which song I would be actually. 
>> CORRECT
But If I can be, I would like to be a song for people who feel tired and exhausted in their life. 
>> But If I could, I would like to be a song for people who feel tired and exhausted of their lives. 
As I mentioned, I like to listen a music which has a comfort lyric. 
>> As I mentioned, I like to listen to music which has comforting lyrics. 
The reason why I like to hear is that sometimes I feel get a console and feel same as the people. 
>> The reason why I like to listen to it is that sometimes I feel consoled and feel sympathized by other people. 
I think a song is a magic of cure. 
>> I think a song is a magic cure. 
As I am getting older, I think a life is not easy. 
>> As I am getting older, I think life is not easy. 
I think a song is a good way to control our life. 
>> CORRECT
So If I can be a song, I want to whisper some nice words to people and makes feel be happy like a bed bracket in the winter season.
>> So if I could be a song, I want to whisper some nice words to people and make them feel happy like a bed bracket in the winter season.
This topic is very new and I have not thought about it in my life. 
>> CORRECT
OR I am not used to this topic so it hasn\'t crossed my mind before.
I wish you understand what I want to say : )
>> CORRECT

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