If you were a song, what song would you be and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I were a song, I would like to be a classic song. It;s peaceful and make people who listen to that feel relax. I want to be a person who give the impression that makes people feel easy. Because I think my writing task became too short, I decided to write about other topics. First, if I were an animal, I would like to be a bird. This is because I want to try flying the sky. I think many people think so. Second if I were a musical instrument, I would like to be a guitar. it is portable and very famous so I would be loved for a long time. In fact, around me, there are a lot of guitarist than any other instrumental players. However, honestly, I don\'t want to a song, an animal, a musical instrument. I want to be myself.
강사 첨삭
Hello Kevin!
It\'s good to see your homework today. In case you think your essay is short, you can make it longer by choosing an example of a song that you could describe yourself. Then you could choose the lyrics which are related to your life. Keep on writing and practicing! ^^
~T. Maine
>>Correct.
It;s peaceful and make people who listen to that feel relax.
>>It\'s peaceful and makes people feel relaxed.
I want to be a person who give the impression that makes people feel easy.
>>I want to be a person who gives the impression that makes people feel comfortable.
Because I think my writing task became too short, I decided to write about other topics.
>>I think my writing task became too short, so I decided to write about other topics.
First, if I were an animal, I would like to be a bird.
>>Correct.
This is because I want to try flying the sky.
>>This is because I want to fly in the sky.
I think many people think so.
>>Correct.
Second if I were a musical instrument, I would like to be a guitar.
>>Second, if I were a musical instrument, I would like to be a guitar.
it is portable and very famous so I would be loved for a long time.
>>It is portable and very famous so I would be loved for a long time.
In fact, around me, there are a lot of guitarist than any other instrumental players.
>>In fact around me, there are a lot of guitarists than other musical instrument players
However, honestly, I don\'t want to a song, an animal, a musical instrument.
>>However, honestly, I don\'t want to be a song, an animal, or a musical instrument.
I want to be myself.
>>Correct.
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