If you were given an opportunity to be born again, in which country would you like to be born?

2016-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I have never lived in foreign countries for a long time although I have traveled to as many as almost 20 countries mostly on business. When I went foreign countries, I used to stay for a short period time like a week. Living permanently and staying short could make a lot of difference.Some countries like Thailand, New Zealand, Paraguay, middle east countries or even African countries could be wonderful to travel and stay for a few days because their landscapes and sceneries are quite different from your country and they look exotic. You would be overwhelmed by the different atmosphere they create. However, living in a country permanently is a completely different story. You have to take all the factors into account such as climate, the level of economic development, educational system, safety, welfare system, etc. Considering all of them, I think that Canada is on the top of my list. People in Canada are nice and well educated. Their social safety net is well designed and working well.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sir [이름]!
Happy Thursday. ^^

I am so happy to hear that you\'ve been to twenty countries.

I am envious. Hihihi.

I hope that I can also travel abroad and Korea is on top of my list. ^^

I really want to see the beautiful sceneries there.

You are right. It is really good to live in Canada.
I guess there are a lot of opportunities there.

I hope you can visit my country someday.
Have a wonderful day.
Teacher Nina


I have never lived in foreign countries for a long time although I have traveled to as many as almost 20 countries mostly on business.

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>> OR: I have never lived in foreign countries for a long time, although I have traveled to as many as almost 20 countries mostly on business.

When I went foreign countries, I used to stay for a short period time like a week.

>> When I went to foreign countries, I used to stay for a short period of  time like a week.

Living permanently and staying short could make a lot of difference.

>> correct

Some countries like Thailand, New Zealand, Paraguay, middle east countries or even African countries could be wonderful to travel and stay for a few days because their landscapes and sceneries are quite different from your country and they look exotic.

>> correct

You would be overwhelmed by the different atmosphere they create.

>> correct

However, living in a country permanently is a completely different story.

>> correct

You have to take all the factors into account such as climate, the level of economic development, educational system, safety, welfare system, etc.

>> correct

Considering all of them, I think that Canada is on the top of my list.

>> correct

People in Canada are nice and well educated.

>> correct

Their social safety net is well designed and working well.

>> correct

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