If you were given one million dollars to spend how would you spend it? Discuss your ideas by giving
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I have never thought that I won a lottery or earn a lot of money. However, if I was given one million dollars, I would purchase the house which is located near the beach and green first. I also book a flight for trip around the world for a year. There are many countries that I haven\'t heard. I will visit all the countries and will experience everything that I can do. If I still have money after world trip, I would treat all the people who had a relationship with me until now.
It is said that people can do anything, if they have money. That\'s why we all try to work hard, want to be successful and win a lottery. But we also know that there still things we could never buy with money. It is not difficult to see the news about someone who won a lottery and then, have encountered difficulties. Because people who had a close relationship expect money were given that might cause serious conflicts. So, I don\'t need to get a lot of money without any efforts. I am quite satisfied with my life.
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Hi there Mr. [이름]~! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework! You\'ve got great ideas! Keep speaking your mind! For me, I always dream of winning the lottery. kkk And I already have plans in mind. Anyway, let\'s enjoy our simple life. See you~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I have never thought that I won a lottery or earn a lot of money.
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However, if I was given one million dollars, I would purchase the house which is located near the beach and green first.
>>> However, if I were given a million dollars, I would purchase the house which is located near the beach and green first.
I also book a flight for trip around the world for a year.
>>> I will also book a flight for a trip around the world for a year.
There are many countries that I haven\'t heard.
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I will visit all the countries and will experience everything that I can do.
>>> CORRECT
If I still have money after the world trip, I would treat all the people who had a relationship with me until now.
>>> CORRECT
It is said that people can do anything, if they have money.
It is said that people can do anything, if they have money.
>>> CORRECT
That\'s why we all try to work hard, want to be successful and win a lottery.
>>> CORRECT
But we also know that there are still things we could never buy with money.
>>> CORRECT
It is not difficult to see the news about someone who won a lottery and then, have encountered difficulties.
>>> CORRECT
Because people who had a close relationship expect money were given that might cause serious conflicts.
>>> CORRECT
So, I don\'t need to get a lot of money without any efforts.
>>> CORRECT
I am quite satisfied with my life.
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