If you were on a deserted island, what would you bring and why?

2018-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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You fell asleep on the boat. Then I woke up and found myself lying on an island where nobody was. You can get three things you want just once back. I think everyone has had this kind of imagination. So I'm going to write today about what kind of things I would take if I were left alone on a deserted island. First, I'm going to take a knife. I'll bring a knife that can be used to groom animals or cut the fruit of an uninhabited island, and in a variety of cases. Second, I'll take the lighter. Unmanned islands are different from where we live, so they will be as cold at night as a desert and extremely hot during the day. I'm going to take a lighter or an igniter, the only tool I can use to keep up with this temperature difference. Third, I'll take the water. The only water that exists on an uninhabited island is sea water or dew. So I'll take some bottled water that we can drink. Why don't you try to imagine yourself like me? Start right now!

강사 첨삭

You fell asleep on the boat. Then I woke up and found myself lying on an island where nobody was. 
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You can get three things you want just once back. I think everyone has had this kind of imagination. 
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So I\'m going to write today about what kind of things I would take if I were left alone on a deserted island. 
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First, I\'m going to take a knife.
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 I\'ll bring a knife that can be used to groom animals or cut the fruit of an uninhabited island, and in a variety of cases.
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Second, I\'ll take the lighter.
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 Unmanned islands are different from where we live, so they will be as cold at night as a desert and extremely hot during the day.
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 I\'m going to take a lighter or an igniter, the only tool I can use to keep up with this temperature difference.
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Third, I\'ll take the water. The only water that exists on an uninhabited island is sea water or dew. 
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So I\'ll take some bottled water that we can drink.
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Why don\'t you try to imagine yourself like me? Start right now!
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