If you were planning a party on a very small budget, what would you do to make it a great party?

2022-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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First, in my opinion, doing a party with parents usually makes an awkward situation. So for me, just having a party only with my friends is more comfortable. And also I think if I am going to have a party, I have to invite a lot of people. Then, the people will make us to feel like in the big party. And also I need to borrow a big place to have a big party. But, if I am going to have a party, there are so many things to prepare. And I don\'t like to prepare a lot of things, so I usually don\'t have a party. And also I think just playing with my friends in outside is more interesting for me.

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Hi [이름]!
 
Yes, having a party with friends is much better. But if you want to have a good time on a budget, playing outside is much better. 

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First, in my opinion, doing a party with parents usually makes an awkward situation.
>> CORRECT

So for me, just having a party only with my friends is more comfortable.
>> CORRECT

And also I think if I am going to have a party, I have to invite a lot of people.
>> I also think that if I have a party, I have to invite a lot of people. 

Then, the people will make us to feel like in the big party.
>> Then, the people will make us to feel like were in a big party. 

And also I need to borrow a big place to have a big party.
>> I also need to borrow a big place to have a big party. 

But, if I am going to have a party, there are so many things to prepare.
>> There are also a lot of things to prepare. 

And I don\'t like to prepare a lot of things, so I usually don\'t have a party.
>> I don\'t like to prepare a lot of things, so I usually don\'t have a party.

And also I think just playing with my friends in outside is more interesting for me.
>> I just like playing with my friends outside. It is more interesting for me. 

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