If you were President of Korea, what would you do to improve Koreans' health?
학생이 쓴 원문
In order to improve public’s health, the government should prohibit companies from producing or selling harmful products such as cigarettes, liquor, unhealthy beverages, etc.Casino or online gambling should be banned as well. However, I’m mature enough to be aware of the fact that even the president is not able to execute her power to implement policies on her own initiative although she relatively has stronger power than other politicians. Haven’t you noticed how even Obama who is the president of the most powerful country in the world has struggled to pass his bills for the health care system, immigration policies, or the way of engagement in Syria or Iraq’s civil war? A bill should be passed by congress where his opposition party, Republican, is dominating. In a democratic government, president cannot do everything by himself/herself. Checks and Balances of three powers (administrative, legislative and judicial) are emphasized to keep one party from acting a totalitarian.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Sir [이름]!
Good day! Thanks for your composition.
I agree with you. Even presidents can\'t execute their power in some instances.
I think people should be mature enough to be conscious about their health.
I had a wonderful week with you again, Sir.Have a great day. Talk to you soon/
Teacher Nina
In order to improve public’s health, the government should prohibit companies from producing or selling harmful products such as cigarettes, liquor, unhealthy beverages, etc.
>> Correct
>> OR: In order to improve the public’s health, the government should prohibit companies from producing or selling harmful products such as cigarettes, liquor, unhealthy beverages, etc.
Casino or online gambling should be banned as well.
>> Correct
However, I’m mature enough to be aware of the fact that even the president is not able to execute her power to implement policies on her own initiative although she relatively has stronger power than other politicians.
>> However, I’m mature enough to be aware of the fact that even the president is not able to execute her power to implement policies on her own initiative. although she relatively has a stronger power than the other politicians.
Haven’t you noticed how even Obama who is the president of the most powerful country in the world has struggled to pass his bills for the health care system, immigration policies, or the way of engagement in Syria or Iraq’s civil war?
>> Correct
A bill should be passed by congress where his opposition party, Republican, is dominating.
>> Did you mean: A bill should pass by the congress where his opposition party, Republican, is dominating.
In a democratic government, president cannot do everything by himself/herself.
>> Correct
Checks and Balances of three powers (administrative, legislative and judicial) are emphasized to keep one party from acting a totalitarian.
>> Checks and Balances of three powers (administrative, legislative and judicial) are emphasized to keep one party from acting totalitarian.
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