If you were the leader of your country, what would you change in order to make people happier? Pleas
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If i were a leader of Korea, i would reform both educational parts and political parts. In the field of education, I will distribute the support funding to the university in city into the university in countryside and try to change the awarness of the university in countryside as higer education level. In the field of politics, i will turn the company-centered benefit into worker-centered benefit. So i want to make the country where workers are rich.
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Good evening Ms. [이름]!
Wow, I\'m totally amazed with your answer.
I hope the government would think of this. Thank you.
If i were a leader of Korea, i would reform both educational parts and political parts.
>>If I were the leader of Korea, I would reform both educational and political aspects.
In the field of education, I will distribute the support funding to the university in city into the university in countryside and try to change the awarness of the university in countryside as higer education level.
>>In the field of education, we will try to allocate funding to universities in cities and to change the perception of universities in rural areas to higher education levels.
In the field of politics, i will turn the company-centered benefit into worker-centered benefit.
>>In the field of politics, we will change the corporate-oriented welfare system to worker-centered welfare.
So i want to make the country where workers are rich.
>>So I want to make a country where workers are rich.
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