If you were the President of Korea, what would you do to improve Koreans\' health?

2022-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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I\'m gonna support young parents if I am the President of South Korea. Nowadays, South Korea is experiencing aging society. That\'s because a lot of people don\'t try to have their baby because they don\'t want to spent too much money to their baby. Because of this reason, I want to support young parents if I am the President of South Korea. So that I can encourage other young people to have their baby to make stable society.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!
What a nice idea. Have you ever thought of entering politics someday? You\'d make a good leader. Anyway, great job. see you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I\'m gonna support young parents if I am the President of South Korea.
>>CORRECT!
Nowadays, South Korea is experiencing aging society.
>>Nowadays, South Korea is suffering from an aging society.
That\'s because a lot of people don\'t try to have their baby because they don\'t want to spent too much money to their baby.
>>That\'s because a lot of people don\'t try to have babies because they don\'t want to spend too much money on their baby.
Because of this reason, I want to support young parents if I am the President of South Korea.
>>CORRECT!
So that I can encourage other young people to have their baby to make stable society.
>>So that I can encourage other young people to have babies to make a stable society.

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