-If you were to create a superhero, what would be its characteristics or qualities and how would it

2019-10-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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If I can make a superhero, I will make super cute pet like cats or dogs. We don\'t need any strong, powerful superhero who just can make trouble with people. Even though I don\'t want to make superhero, if I have to make something. I will make just pet that it can makes people happier. It has power to make people happier and remove depression. When we just see this pets, we take a energy for living and disappear every indeed furious. Hopefully, the world is going to happier than before.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jay! Nice thought on this one! I like it! ^ ^ Why not just have pets that would make your sadness disappear, make you energize and think positively about life. Then we could all just be heroes to ourselves and others! Why not?! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

If I can make a superhero, I will make super cute pet like cats or dogs.

>>CORRECT
We don\'t need any strong, powerful superhero who just can make trouble with people.

>>CORRECT
Even though I don\'t want to make superhero, if I have to make something. I will make just pet that it can makes people happier.

>>Even though I don\'t want to make a superhero, if I have to make one, I will make just a pet that can make people happier.

It has power to make people happier and remove depression.

>>It would have the power to make people happy and remove their depression.

When we just see this pets, we take a energy for living and disappear every indeed furious.

>>Just by looking at these pets, we can get energy from them and feelings of anger or probably negative thoughts and feelings would disappear.

Hopefully, the world is going to happier than before.

>>Hopefully, the world would be happier than before.

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