If you were to make a new law on liquor control, what would it be?

2012-03-06 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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I was quite surprised when I found Canada has very strict liquor law while I studied there. In Korea, it's easy to get any alcohol at the markets. Of course, id cards required to be shown for the purchase. Because young people under 18-year-old are not permitted to drink any alcohol. I sometimes enjoy dringking beer or wine. But I don't like to drink until I can not control myself. I think the biggest problem caused by alcohol in the society is disturbing others such as "arguments", "drink driving".. So people need to be aware of the serious influence of drinking, while it gives us some pleasure. There is many customs to having alcohol in our history. However, the awareness of its harms should be fully provided for its users.

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Hello there [이름],                   Good afternoon! Thank you for taking time to answer and write your homework. Take care! See you later! -T. Faye-   I was quite surprised when I found Canada has very strict liquor law while I studied there. >>Correct  In Korea, it\'s easy to get any alcohol at the markets. >>Correct Of course, id cards required to be shown for the purchase. >>Correct  Because young people under 18-year-old are not permitted to drink any alcohol.>>CorrectI sometimes enjoy dringking beer or wine. >>I sometimes enjoy drinking beer or wine. But I don\'t like to drink until I can not control myself. >>Correct I think the biggest problem caused by alcohol in the society is disturbing others such as \"arguments\", \"drink driving\".. >>CorrectSo people need to be aware of the serious influence of drinking, while it gives us some pleasure. >>CorrectThere is many customs to having alcohol in our history. >>There are many customs about drinking alcohol in our country.However, the awareness of its harms should be fully provided for its users. >>Correct

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