If you were to write your own storybook, what would it be about?

2022-08-17 · 첨삭 강사 Gela

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If I were to write my own storybook, I would it be about bright and funny life of an idol like a hero or a princess. Because I think the most important feature of storybooks is giving dream, lesson and hope. For example I had dreamed of being a baker because of an animation. So, I could do my best to make my dream come true. Like this, storybooks influence students so, I would write about happy and positive story.

강사 첨삭

Hey again, Kimberly!

Thank you for keeping up with your homework submission!
Your answer is so relatable! I started baking because of a cartoon series about a baker!^^
I would love to read your storybook! I think it would be a wonderful story!

~ Teacher Gela

If I were to write my own storybook, I would it be about bright and funny life of an idol like a hero or a princess. 
>> If I were to write my own storybook, it would be about the bright and funny life of an idol like a hero or a princess. 
Because I think the most important feature of storybooks is giving dream, lesson and hope. 
>> Because I think the most important feature of storybooks is giving dreams, lessons, and hope. 
For example I had dreamed of being a baker because of an animation. 
>> For example, I had dreamed of being a baker because of animation. 
So, I could do my best to make my dream come true. 
>> CORRECT
Like this, storybooks influence students so, I would write about happy and positive story.
>> Like this, storybooks influence students, and I would write a happy and positive story.

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