If you will adopt an animal, what would it be and why?

2020-03-18 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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If I have a pet, it will probably be a dog. First, dogs or cats are more easy to raise because it is popular so, there are a lot of information and institution for them. We can get anything easily than other animals. For example, youtube channels for them is a lot. Second, I like a cute animal. I usually watch dogs which are very cute through some instagram accounts. Every time I watch their pictures or videos, I want to have a dog. However, it is very important to be careful before adopting because they are also family after adopting. If you want to have a dog or other animals because they are just cute, it can be wrong judgement. Animals need to train and care and love of people, you can feel sometimes it is tired. Also, having a dog need a lot of money. All of people who want to have a pet should contemplate. And then if you choose to grow them, you should take responsibility till the end.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!
~Lucy

First, dogs or cats are more easy to raise because it is popular so, there are a lot of information and institution for them. 
>>CORRECT!
We can get anything easily than other animals. 
>>CORRECT!
For example, youtube channels for them is a lot.
>>
For example, YouTube channels for them is a lot.
Second, I like a cute animal. 
>>CORRECT!
I usually watch dogs which are very cute through some instagram accounts. 
>>I usually watch dogs which are very cute through some Instagram accounts. 
Every time I watch their pictures or videos, I want to have a dog.
>>CORRECT!
However, it is very important to be careful before adopting because they are also family after adopting. 
>>CORRECT!
If you want to have a dog or other animals because they are just cute, it can be wrong judgement. 
>>CORRECT!
Animals need to train and care and love of people, you can feel sometimes it is tired. 
>>Animals need to be trained, cared and loved by people, you can sometimes feel  it is tiring. 
Also, having a dog need a lot of money.
>>Also, having a dog needs a lot of money.
 All of people who want to have a pet should contemplate. 
>>CORRECT!
And then if you choose to grow them, you should take responsibility till the end.
>>CORRECT!

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