If you will be given a three day holiday- Would you rather visit a city or go somewhere out in natur

2015-02-26 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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If I would be given a few day holiday, I would rather go to the countryside than hang around in the city. Aren’t we all already sick and tired of living in grey cities covered with concrete and artificial facilities? We are born in nature. Some specialists say that humans get energized and refreshed by strolling down a path in the forest, touching the unpaved ground, and taking a breath of fresh air that is not polluted. We, indeed, need to escape from the city from time to time. Humans are hard-wired to love and need exposure to the natural world. Our inborn affiliation for nature may explain why we prefer to live in houses with particular views of the natural world.Spending more time outdoors nurtures our “nature neurons” and our natural creativity. In workplaces designed with nature in mind, employees are more productive and take less sick time.Joggers who exercise in a natural green setting feel more restored and less anxious, or depressed than people who run in a urban setting.

강사 첨삭

Good evening Sir [이름].

How was your day?

I felt better after reading your composition.

Thanks for your time and for making my day.

It is really good to spend some time in the countryside.

We need to unwind in a great and quiet place.

How often do you go to the countryside?

Do you have any plans to build a house there?

Share you answers in class.

Teacher Nina

If I would be given a few day holiday, I would rather go to the countryside than hang around in the city.

>> correct

>> If I would be given a few days off, I would go to the countryside.

Aren’t we all already sick and tired of living in grey cities covered with concrete and artificial facilities?

>> correct

We are born in nature.

>> correct

Some specialists say that humans get energized and refreshed by strolling down a path in the forest, touching the unpaved ground, and taking a breath of fresh air that is not polluted.

>> Did you mean: Some specialists say that humans get energized and refreshed by strolling down a path in the forest, touching the unpaved ground, and taking a breath of fresh air.

We, indeed, need to escape from the city from time to time.

>> correct

Humans are hard-wired to love and need exposure to the natural world.

>> correct

Our inborn affiliation for nature may explain why we prefer to live in houses with particular views of the natural world.

>> correct

>> Our inborn affiliation for nature may explain why we prefer to live in houses with particular views of the nature.

Spending more time outdoors nurtures our “nature neurons” and our natural creativity.

>> correct

In workplaces designed with nature in mind, employees are more productive and take less sick time.

>> correct

Joggers who exercise in a natural green setting feel more restored and less anxious, or depressed than people who run in a urban setting.

>> Joggers who exercise in a natural green setting feel more restored and less anxious, or depressed than people who run in an urban setting.

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