If you will have your own business, what will it be?

2020-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Don

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Dear [Name], I don\'t want to do my own business. because my own business is very difficult work. As you know, I do sales, managing money, stock control and so on. if I have a lot of money, I can use emplyee. but I have a little money. So I must do all things, so I don\'t want to do it. 15 years ago, I tried to move another company from USA company. My boss pursuaded me to give some business. but I rejected his suggestion at that time. the business which he should have given to me was 5 thousand million won as business size.

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Hi [이름]!

Have an awesome Christmas with your family!

T. DON

Dear [Name],

I don\'t want to do my own business. because my own business is very difficult work.
>> I don\'t want to have my own business because having your own business is a very difficult work. 

As you know, I do sales, managing money, stock control and so on. if I have a lot of money, I can use emplyee. but I have a little money.
>> As you know, I do sales, managing money, stock control and so on. If I have a lot of money, I can hire employees but I will have a little profit.

So I must do all things, so I don\'t want to do it.
>> So I must do everything if I have a business so I don\'t want to have one.


15 years ago, I tried to move another company from USA company. My boss pursuaded me to give some business. but I rejected his suggestion at that time. the business which he should have given to me was 5 thousand million won as business size.
>> 15 years ago, I tried to move to another company from a USA company. My boss persuaded me to give think of a business but I rejected his suggestion. The business which he should have given to me was 5 thousand million won as a starting capital.

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