If you would become the president for just one day, what would you do, and why?

2020-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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If I would become a president of USA, I would like to get rid of discrimination. After the Trump getting his position, the world gets worse. There is a gross violation of the people\'s right. We should show our respect to others and the president must be a role model of citizens. I will appear on the TV shows as much as possible and make a touching speech about human rights.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Sue!

I don\'t know know why you chose the USA, but I guess it\'s because of Mr. [Name].
I have read your composition well and I must say that you did a good job.
However, I have made some modifications for you to review later own.

I will call you again tomorrow. See you then!\\

__Teacher Mayleen :)


If I would become a president of USA, I would like to get rid of discrimination.
>>> If I would become the president of the USA, I would like to get rid of discrimination.
After the Trump getting his position, the world gets worse.
>>> When Trump won the position, the situation of the world worsen.
There is a gross violation of the people\'s right.
>>> There is a gross violation of the human rights.
We should show our respect to others and the president must be a role model of citizens.
>>> We should show our respect to others and the president must serve as a role model to the citizens.
I will appear on the TV shows as much as possible and make a touching speech about human rights.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: I will appear on TV shows as much as possible and make/deliver a touching speech about human rights.

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