If you would celebrate something special, how would you celebrate it? Why?

2018-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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I would like to celebrate Halloween, because it is not the day Korean commonly celebrate. I have experienced to celebrate Halloween when I was in UAE and I remember that my children really enjoyed it. We wore special clothes like batman, spider man and then visited our neighbor asking some candies. My son was really active to get candies even though he is a introvert person. I realized that special activities make my son active. He has changed his character to good way. I am planning to celebrate Halloween this year and will prepare special gifts for my children.

강사 첨삭

This is exciting, Sir [이름]!

This is a fun way to have outdoor activities like trick or treat which most kids find it very interesting. It could also be a family activity. Hang in there yet, you still have months to go to prepare for the Halloween. Great thoughts!

~Teacher Eunice


I would like to celebrate Halloween, because it is not the day Korean commonly celebrate.

>>> I would like to celebrate Halloween, because it is not the day that Koreans commonly celebrate.  

I have experienced to celebrate Halloween when I was in UAE and I remember that my children really enjoyed it. 

>>> I have experienced to celebrate Halloween when I was in the UAE, and I remembered that my children really enjoyed it. 

We wore special clothes like batman, spider man and then visited our neighbor asking some candies.

>>> We wore special clothes like batman, spider man and then visited our neighbors asking some candies.  

My son was really active to get candies even though he is a introvert person.

>>> My son was really active to get candies even though he is an introvert person.

I realized that special activities make my son active. 

>>> Correct!

He has changed his character to good way.
>>>
He has changed his character in a good way.

I am planning to celebrate Halloween this year and will prepare special gifts for my children.

>>> I am planning to celebrate Halloween this year, and we will prepare special gifts for my children. 


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