If you would write a song regarding your life, what will it be and why?

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If I could, I would write a song about my loneness that I have experienced in my early days.

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>> If I could, I would write a song about my loneness that I experienced when I was young.

I was used to spend time by myself at home when I returned from elementary school because no one was at home.

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>> I was used to spend time alone at home after school because no one was at home.

My farther and grandparents had to work in the field.

>> My father and grandparents had to work in the field.

Especially in spring, my loneness peaked because the weather was so beautiful.

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>> My loneness was at its peak during spring because the weather was so beautiful.

The flowers started blossoming, the wind is soft and the flowers were gently swaying in the breeze.

>> The flowers started blossoming, the wind is cool and the flowers were gently swaying in the breeze.

The small town I lived in was deadly quiet in the spring season.

>> The small town where I lived was deadly quiet in the spring season.

Everything was perfect except that I was alone.

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>> Everything was perfect except the fact that I was alone.

I just gawked a huddle of dragonflies hovering in the sky in my front yard.

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The gorgeous spring weather made me feel much lonely.

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>> The gorgeous spring weather made me feel more lonely.

Most of my friends also went to the field to support their parents, but I was left alone because my parents did not want me to engage in hard physical labor.

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>> Most of my friends also went to the field to support their parents, but I was left alone. Because my parents did not want me to engage in hard physical labor.

When the world is filled with sunlight, brighter and longer, when the song of Mother Nature becomes stronger and stranger, Spring has begun, but I am still lonely.

>> Did you mean: When the world is filled with sunlight, brighter and it is longer, the song of Mother Nature becomes stronger and stranger. Spring has begun, but I am still lonely.