Imagine that a big new department store is being built in your hometown. Do you support this develop
학생이 쓴 원문
Actually, There are 2 big department store aroung my home.
I think it's helpful for improve the quality of people's life.
Because usually there's many cultural attractions in big department store like theater or concert hall.
In addition, big department store is also a good shelter for me.
Because The weather is too hot in korea. I can avoid the heat and relax in department store. :)
강사 첨삭
Hi, Jane!
Indeed, department stores help aid the hot and humid weather in summer.
Because of their air conditioning system. :)
Like you, I also go there if it\'s hot.
See you tomorrow!
_Teacher Dianne
Actually, There are 2 big department store aroung my home.
>> Actually, There are 2 big department stores around my home.
I think it\'s helpful for improve the quality of people\'s life.
I think it\'s helpful for improve the quality of people\'s life.
>> I think it\'s helpful to improve the quality of people\'s life.
Because usually there\'s many cultural attractions in big department store like theater or concert hall.
Because usually there\'s many cultural attractions in big department store like theater or concert hall.
>> Because usually there are many cultural attractions in big department stores like theaters or concert halls.
In addition, big department store is also a good shelter for me.
>> In addition, a big department store is also a good shelter for me.
Because The weather is too hot in korea. I can avoid the heat and relax in department store. :)
Because The weather is too hot in korea. I can avoid the heat and relax in department store. :)
>> Because the weather is too hot in Korea. I can avoid the heat and relax in a department store. :)
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