Impact of Western music
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These days hiphop music is the best favorite music in Korea. When I was a teenager, I growed listening to hiphop music with my friends. It can be influenced to many teenagers to have a dream which is being a famous musician. After that BTS became a greatest star in the world.
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These days hiphop music is the best favorite music in Korea.
>> Hip-hop is the most popular genre of music in Korea these days.
When I was a teenager, I growed listening to hiphop music with my friends.
>> When I was a teenager, I grew up listening to hip-hop music with my friends.
It can be influenced to many teenagers to have a dream which is being a famous musician.
>> It influenced many teenagers to dream of becoming a famous musician.
After that BTS became a greatest star in the world.
>> After that, BTS became the most well-known Korean star in the world.
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