Importance of gathering family
학생이 쓴 원문
I don’t really visit my parents house frequently. Because they are busy or i’m busy. But i think it’s important to gather family in specific place and talk about each other’s life story. Through this, family is more powerful than before.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Mark! I agree that family gathering is very important. This is the time when you spend a happy time with your family. Everyone is busy, so once in a while it is nice to see and spend quality time with our loved ones. We will talk more about this in class. I will see you. Take care always!~ T. Lyn
I don’t really visit my parents house frequently.
>>Actually, I don\'t visit my parents\' house very often.
Because they are busy or i’m busy.
>>It is because they are busy and I\'m busy too.
But i think it’s important to gather family in specific place and talk about each other’s life story.
>>However, I think it is important for families to gather in a specific place and share life stories with each other.
Through this, family is more powerful than before.
>>This makes the family bonds stronger than before.
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