Importance of the environment
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강사 첨삭
Jay,
I agree with you. Your environment will greatly influence how you will become as a person.(\",)
~Lynn
You know,there are two hypothesis about characteristic of human.
>> You know, there are two hypothesis about the characteristics of humans.
In my opinion, people are affected easily by environment around them.
>> In my opinion, people are easily affected by their environment.
I have heard a story about twin.
>> I have heard a story about twins.
They were aparted from each other when they were so young and met again after they became adults.
>> They were separated from each other when they were children and met again when they became adults.
Of course, each environment where they have been was different.
>> correct!
OR>> They have grown up in different environments.
Although they are really twins but the current lives for twins are drastically different and also they have different personalities.
>> Although they are really twins but their current lives are drastically different and also they have different personalities.
From this example, it shows people are affected by environment much more than inherent something.
>> From this example, it shows people are affected by their environment much more than genes.
Thus, every parents should try to make good environment to their children if they want their children to have good personalities.
>> Thus, every parent should try to make good environment for their children if they want their children to have good personalities.
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