Important things in our life.

2010-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jessica

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In the modern society, it's hard to live without money. More and more materialism is overflowed and society is more desolated. Of course money can't buy happiness but unfortunately, it's hard to be happy without money actually. In my opinion, money is an essential factor at our life but money never be priority of our living I think. If somebody ask me that "What do you think it's the most important in life?", I couldn't answer easily. Money as well as other factors is one of the most important things in our life too.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]. I do agree with you. There is a saying that “Money is the root of evil”. Meaning, money can buy everything even you, yourself, in which you will get paid and they will ask you to do something bad. And this is actually true in real life. Money conquers everything, actually. But for me, as long as I am financially stable, my life would be fine. Hope you too..See you.^^   In the modern society, it's hard to live without money. >>>correct!!! More and more materialism is overflowed and society is more desolated. >>>More and more materialism are overflowed and the society is more desolated. Of course money can't buy happiness but unfortunately, it's hard to be happy without money actually. >>>correct In my opinion, money is an essential factor at our life but money never be priority of our living I think. >>>In my opinion, money is an essential factor in our life but money can never be a priority of our living, I think. If somebody ask me that "What do you think it's the most important in life?", I couldn't answer easily. >>>If somebody asks me “What do you think is the most important thing in our life?”, I couldn’t  answer easily. Money as well as other factors is one of the most important things in our life too. >>>Correct          

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