Impression of the concert

2010-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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I went Vibe's concert last friday.As Vibe is very famous singer,there were many people who wait their concert.And I arrived there a little early, so I went around near place from concert hall. I saw a beautiful shedding of water and many trees. I felt good,then time was up to begin a concert. So I enter the hall. They started to sing their new song,it was really nice and very impressive.They sang many popular songs,sometimes I followed their songs, it was fun.The concert continued about three hours,but all times were so good.And they really have a nice voice, I surprised,after listening their live music. I thought that I so had a good time.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], Wow, while reading your composition I began to imagine the setting. I think it’s really fun. I’m also curious about Vibes, I’ll search it on the web If I have time. I’m glad you enjoyed. Here are the corrections. Take care, -- Connie --   I went Vibe's concert last friday. >> I went to Vibe’s concert last Friday. As Vibe is very famous singer,there were many people who wait their concert. >> As Vibe is a very famous singer, there were many people who waited for the concert. And I arrived there a little early, so I went around near place from concert hall. I saw a beautiful shedding of water and many trees. >> I arrived there a early so I went around the place of the concert hall, I saw beautiful fountain and trees.  I felt good,then time was up to begin a concert. So I enter the hall. >> I felt good and so when the concert is about to begin I entered the hall. They started to sing their new song, it was really nice and very impressive. >> Correct They sang many popular songs, sometimes I followed their songs, it was fun. >> They sang many popular songs, sometimes I follow their songs, it was fun. The concert continued about three hours,but all times were so good. >> The concert continued for about three hours and the whole time is really good. And they really have a nice voice, I surprised,after listening their live music. >> They have a nice voice and I was so surprised and astonished after listening to their live music. I thought that I so had a good time >> I think, I had a good time.

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