Improvements should be done in our country
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I think Korea should improve the law. It’s weak to criminal so there are a lot of crimes and criminal don’t think that it’s serious. It can cause unfair judgement. That’s why I think we need improvement with the law.
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I think Korea should improve the law.
>> I think Korea should improve its laws.
It’s weak to criminal so there are a lot of crimes and criminal don’t think that it’s serious.
>> The justice system is weak because there are still a lot of criminals and crimes.
It can cause unfair judgement.
>> It can cause unfair judgements.
That’s why I think we need improvement with the law.
>>That’s why I think we need improvement in terms of the law.
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