In a globalized world, is the concept of strict national identity becoming outdated?
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Interestingly, in a globalised world, chauvinism became a trend. This is because a globalised society has brought the vulnerabilities of globalisation to the surface. People tend to scrutinise more closely the side effects, such as job security, social security, and economic concerns. Many people fear that their jobs are at risk because immigrants are taking their positions at lower salaries. Alongside this, many people regard there are social disorders from certain religious groups and ethnicities. Moreover, many citizens believe their taxes are spent on sustaining asylum seekers and refugees. Due to widespread discontent with globalisation, many citizens choose to be conservative, retaining strict national identities. In Europe, various administrations called for protectionism in a globalised society to protect national interests. For example, the United Kingdom recently announced that it will strengthen visa requirements and send refugees to African nations before making decisions.
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Thank you for this as well, Aciel!
Interestingly, in a globalised world, chauvinism became a trend.
>>> Interestingly, in a globalized world, chauvinism has become a trend.
This is because a globalised society has brought the vulnerabilities of globalisation to the surface. >>> This is because globalization has brought its vulnerabilities to the surface.
People tend to scrutinise more closely the side effects, such as job security, social security, and economic concerns.
>>> People tend to scrutinize more closely its side effects, such as job security, social stability, and economic concerns.
Many people fear that their jobs are at risk because immigrants are taking their positions at lower salaries.
>>> correct
Alongside this, many people regard there are social disorders from certain religious groups and ethnicities.
>>> OR: Alongside this, some people believe that certain religious groups and ethnicities contribute to social disorder.
Moreover, many citizens believe their taxes are spent on sustaining asylum seekers and refugees.
>>> correct
Due to widespread discontent with globalisation, many citizens choose to be conservative, retaining strict national identities.
>>> Due to widespread discontent with globalization, many citizens choose to be more conservative, maintaining strict national identities.
In Europe, various administrations called for protectionism in a globalized society to protect national interests.
>>> correct
For example, the United Kingdom recently announced that it will strengthen visa requirements and send refugees to African nations before making decisions.
>>> correct
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