In a world of fast food
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I like fast food world. In the past, it was true that fast food is uhhealthy. But now, It isn\'t.
People are busy, and they want to eat more fast. Simultaneously, they also become more health-conscious. It means to be that most of fast food companies have made their food more healthy. So fast but health-care foods have been developed, such as Diet-coke, Fries without sault, Premium Hamburgers made by fresh food, and stuffs like that. Frankly I don\'t like them,, I just eat more sweety and saulty food, but people who are conscious about their health or their weight, like my wife, can choice these healty-fast food. Overall, unhealthy fast foods still remain, but also there is healthy fast food system. Health is upto your choice.
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Good evening George,
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Teacher Annie
\"In a world of fast food\"
I like fast food world.
>>> I like the world of fast food.
In the past, it was true that fast food is uhhealthy. But now, It isn\'t.
>>> In the past, it was true that fast food is unhealthy but now it isn\'t anymore.
People are busy, and they want to eat more fast.
>>> CORRECT
OR: People are so busy that they want to eat food in a fast manner.
Simultaneously, they also become more health-conscious.
>>> CORRECT
It means to be that most of fast food companies have made their food more healthy.
>>> So as a result, fast food companies have tried to make their foods healthier for their costumers.
So fast but health-care foods have been developed, such as Diet-coke, Fries without sault, Premium Hamburgers made by fresh food, and stuffs like that.
>>> These foods are prepared in a fast way and because a lot of people have become health conscious so variety of foods have been developed such as less sugar coke, fries without salt, premium hamburgers made out of fresh and organic ingredient started to be popular.
Frankly I don\'t like them,, I just eat more sweety and saulty food, but people who are conscious about their health or their weight, like my wife, can choice these healty-fast food.
>>> Frankly I don\'t like them. I still prefer eating sweet and salty foods but people who are health conscious or those who are on a diet like my wife can choose these type of foods.
Overall, unhealthy fast foods still remain, but also there is healthy fast food system.
>>> In conclusion, unhealthy and healthy foods still co exist, we cannot let them disappear.
Health is upto your choice.
>>> But health is your choice so better choose wisely.
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