In between love and friendship(1)
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was high s[이름]ol student, I had a rear malefriend.
At that time, Even if I was alone and spent hard time during tha third
year in high s[이름]ol, I was quite happy to study with him.
Over time, we became close friends. I didn't have enough confidence to live without him. Neither did he. In that way, we reached the age of 20 together.
But our relationship couldn't be connected for a long time.
Because I was unsuccessful in entering the university.
For 1 year, we had to seperate for each life.
Thereafter, I studied an entrance examination again.
강사 첨삭
This is a very interesting story.. "Love and Friendship" might be a very good title. Oftentimes, we only realize what's important to us when it's gone. However, this kind of experience also makes us stronger and a better person.
Here are the corrections..
When I was high s[이름]ol student, I had a rear malefriend.
>>>When I was a high s[이름]ol student, I had a male best friend.
At that time, Even if I was alone and spent hard time during tha thirdyear in high s[이름]ol, I was quite happy to study with him.
>>>I was in my third year then, spending a hard time alone. So I was quite happy studying with him.
Over time, we became close friends.
>>>As time goes by, we became close friends.
I didn't have enough confidence to live without him. Neither did he.
>>>This is correct.
In that way, we reached the age of 20 together.
>>>We were together until we were 20.
But our relationship couldn't be connected for a long time.Because I was unsuccessful in entering the university.
>>>But we couldn't be together when I failed the entrance examination in the university. For 1 year, we had to seperate for each life.
>>>We separated for one year.
Thereafter, I studied an entrance examination again.
>>>Then I took the entrance examination again.
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