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2019-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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Well, when I was talking abour strict Korean traditions, I did keep trying, but I didn\'t come up with the word \'conservative\' and \"patriarchal\". So today, I\'m gonna make sentence with these words. EX 1) I hate most of conservative political magazine, but \"Tribune\" is not the case. EX 2) Typical fathers in Korea are inclined to be conservative being all the time. EX 3) Not like most of asian country, Joseon Dynasty was not entirely patriarchal society in its early era. Ps. In Korea, actually, not all the fathers or early generations of Amercian - Korean or Korean are strict-minded. Like you said, there are so many cool and open-minded people in Korea and Korean society. It\'s a stereotype to think asians are \'conservative\". What I\'ve said was some part of my \"rebellious phase\" as my mom calls it. So if you were curious or found plenty of doubtful point, or even unpleasent, then I want to apologize for my rashness, and my sentences which are so much shorter than postscript.

강사 첨삭

Hello Luke! :)

Thank you for doing your homework

Take care! ^^

- Teacher Tricia

>> Well, when I was talking about our strict Korean traditions, I did keep trying, but I didn\'t come up with the word \'conservative\' and \"patriarchal\". So today, I\'m gonna make sentence with these words.

EX 1) I hate most of conservative political magazine, but \"Tribune\" is not the case.

>> EX 1) I hate most conservative political magazines, but \"Tribune\" is not the one of them.

EX 2) Typical fathers in Korea are inclined to be conservative being all the time.

>> EX 2) Typical fathers in Korea are inclined to be conservative all the time.

EX 3) Not like most of asian country, Joseon Dynasty was not entirely patriarchal society in its early era.

>> EX 3) Not like most of Asian countries, Joseon Dynasty was not an entirely patriarchal society in its early era.

Ps. In Korea, actually, not all the fathers or early generations of Amercian - Korean or Korean are strict-minded.

>> Ps. Actually in Korea, not all fathers or early generations of Amercian - Korean or Korean are strict-minded.

Like you said, there are so many cool and open-minded people in Korea and Korean society.

>> CORRECT!

It\'s a stereotype to think asians are \'conservative\". What I\'ve said was some part of my \"rebellious phase\" as my mom calls it.

>> It\'s stereotype to think Asians are \'conservative\". What I\'ve said was some part of my \"rebellious phase\" as my mom calls it.

So if you were curious or found plenty of doubtful point, or even unpleasent, then I want to apologize for my rashness, and my sentences which are so much shorter than postscript.

>> So if you were curious or found plenty of doubtful point, or even unpleasant words, then I want to apologize for my rashness, and with my sentences which were so much shorter than a postscript.

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