In Korea, most people who retire run their own business. However, according to research, most of its
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Recently “Trend” is changing faster than before. And many peoples want to follow that. So, most of business follow to the public. Typical example, in Korea, toy business is very fast changing. A few years ago, the “slime” was very popular to everyone (the kids and adults). So, slime was called “kidult(kids+ adult) toy”. This is handling only hand and has many types of the slime. This texture is very felt good and could relieved stress.
But this item didn’t last long. Because other toys were continuously released. So, Slime stores were closed. Even now several business area also close.
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Thanks for this [이름] [이름]. Trend definitely changes very fast.
Recently, “trend” is changing faster than before.
>>> correct
And many peoples want to follow that.
>>> And many people want to follow that.
So, most of business follow to the public.
>>> So, most of businesses follow the public.
Typical example, in Korea, toy business is very fast changing.
>>> correct
A few years ago, the “slime” was very popular to everyone (the kids and adults).
>>> correct
So, slime was called “kidult(kids+ adult) toy”.
>>> correct
This is handling only hand and has many types of the slime.
>>> This is handled only with the hands and there are many types of the slime.
This texture is very felt good and could relieved stress.
>>> The texture of this felt very good and could relieve stress.
But this item didn’t last long because other toys were continuously released.
>>> correct
So, slime stores were closed.
>>> correct
Even now several business area also close.
>>> Even now, several businesses area also closing.
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