In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime

2017-12-05 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Plenty of cameras were installed to prevent crimes. Due to being increased many kind of psychosis illness for example psychopath and sociopath, CCTV has been increased every year since it is helpful to monitor a vulnerable area such as a narrow alley way. Moreover, it had been able to help reduce over speed driver because they established it beside a traffic light. Hence, even if it would be able to violate private life, I agree with to being increased installation it. It might reduce a lot of crimes such as robber, murder, riot, rape and etc. Furthermore, I can’t find an advantage about to install a security camera in the public areas. If people live honest, they might not mind about installation. In conclusion, people should accept to install CCTV in the susceptible spaces to avoid unexpected crimes and have to contribute for the safety society.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Jason^^

CCTV cameras are indeed a great help, and I personally object that it is an invasion of privacy, unless it is installed in a private place secretly.

See you later!

Plenty of cameras were installed to prevent crimes.

>>CORRECT!

Due to being increased many kind of psychosis illness for example psychopath and sociopath, CCTV has been increased every year since it is helpful to monitor a vulnerable area such as a narrow alley way.

>>Due to the increase of many kinds of psychotic and sociopathic people, CCTV installations have been increased every year since it is helpful to monitor a vulnerable area such as a narrow alley.

 Moreover, it had been able to help reduce over speed driver because they established it beside a traffic light.

>>Moreover, it had been able to help reduce over speeding drivers because they installed it beside a traffic light.

Hence, even if it would be able to violate private life, I agree with to being increased installation it.

>>Hence, even if it would be able to violate private life, I agree on increasing its installation.

 It might reduce a lot of crimes such as robber, murder, riot, rape and etc.

>> It might reduce a lot of crimes such as robbery, murder, riot, rape and etc.
Furthermore, I can’t find an advantage about of installing a security camera in the public areas.

>>Furthermore, I can’t find any advantage of not installing a security camera in public areas.

If people live honest, they might not mind about installation.

>>If people live honestly, they might not mind the installation.
 In conclusion, people should accept to install CCTV in the susceptible spaces to avoid unexpected crimes and have to contribute for the safety society.

>>  In conclusion, people should accept to install CCTV in susceptible spaces to avoid unexpected crimes and to contribute for the safety of the society.

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