In many countries, the cost of using public transport is rising rapidly. What are the causes of this
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In modern society, it is commonly observed that people have to pay high fee to
take public transports and this cost is rising fast.
>>> In modern society, it is commonly observed that people have to pay high fees to use public transport, and this cost is rising fast.
This essay will examine the main
causes of this issue and suggest possible solutions in turn. >>> correct
To begin with, there are some obvious causes of this issue.
>>> correct
Firstly, operational
costs have surged due to higher fuel prices.
>>> correct
For example, the costs of three main
fuels, which is gas, oil, and electricity, are getting expensive.
>>> OR: For example, the costs of three main fuels—**gas, oil, and electricity—**are increasing.
This is because the
fuel suppliers suggest higher costs because of the wars or other regional
problems, and this became a burden on the operator of public transport system.
>>> This is because fuel suppliers raise prices due to wars or other regional problems, which has become a burden on the operators of public transport systems.
Also, labour costs is keep increasing manually as the treatment of workers are
important issue currently and the cost of living is one of the noticeable factors.
>>> Also, labour costs keep increasing, as the treatment of workers is an important issue, and the cost of living is one of the noticeable factors.
Moreover, the lower number of people whose public transport made financially
difficult for the operators.
>>> Moreover, the lower number of people using public transport makes it financially difficult for the operators.
To supplement this sufficiency, they introduced more
expensive price.
>>> To compensate for this, they introduced higher prices.
On the other hand, a couple of steps could be considered by government and
service provider to tackle the problem.
>>> On the other hand, a couple of steps could be considered by the government and service providers to tackle the problem.
One of the effective solutions would be to
allocate more support to public transport systems and the role of government
must be emphasized.
>>> correct
In many countries, transport systems are privatized, and it is
more flexible for private companies to charge higher fees to satisfy their personal
profit.
>>> correct
For example, japan’s railway system has been largely privatized so that the
cost is much higher than other nations.
>>> For example, Japan’s railway system has been largely privatized, so the costs are much higher than in other nations.
Furthermore, they can conduct discount
policy with promoting eco-friendly campaigns.
>>> Furthermore, companies can conduct discount policies while promoting eco-friendly campaigns.
In result, people will be aware of the
importance of public transport, and suppliers do not have to rise the costs as
passenger numbers increase.
>>> As a result, people will be more aware of the importance of public transport, and operators do not have to raise costs as passenger numbers increase.
In conclusion, the rise in public transport costs comes from higher running costs
and low government help.
>>> correct
To make transport better and cheaper, several actions
must be taken by both government and private companies.
>>> correct
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