In most of the countries, people prefer to live in a rented apartment rather than buying a home? Wha

2021-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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It sounds weird for Korean because most people dream to buy their own house. People are sick and tired of moving out when their contract end and owners ask tenants to pay more rental fee. Tenants can\'t change structure without owner\'s permission even they need to make a hole for installing air conditioner and It is impossible to remodel their rooms as well. In addition, people have to spend quite huge money for transportation fees, agent commission fees and taxes whenever they move out. However, there are many advantages living in rented house. People don\'t have to worry about the house prices which are extremely expensive. It might be impossible for newlyweds to prepare. It can be the chances to save money while they are living rented house and will get opportunity to buy their own house. Tenants don\'t have to care of facility.defects and maintenance because it\'s owner\'s responsibility. To sum up, there are many advantages living in rental house, I prefer to purchase my own house.

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Hi there Mr. [이름]! Today is....... MY BIRTHDAY! Where is my present??? kkkk kidding!!! Anyway, thanks for your ideas on your essays. Keep writing and improve your written English. I think you\'re better in writing than in speaking. kkkk kidding again! Have a nice day! See you tomorrow!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
It sounds weird for Korean because most people dream to buy their own house.
>>> It sounds weird for Korean because most people dreamt of buying their own house.
 People are sick and tired of moving out when their contract end and owners ask tenants to pay more rental fees.
>>> CORRECT
 Tenants can\'t change structure without owner\'s permission even they need to make a hole for installing air conditioner and It is impossible to remodel their rooms as well. 
>>>  Tenants can\'t change the room\'s structure without the owner\'s permission even if they need to make a hole for installing air conditioner and it is impossible to remodel their rooms as well. 
In addition, people have to spend quite huge money for transportation fees, agent commission fees and taxes whenever they move out.
>>> CORRECT
 However, there are many advantages living in rented house.
>>> CORRECT
 People don\'t have to worry about the house prices which are extremely expensive.
>>> CORRECT
 It might be impossible for newlyweds to prepare. 
>>> CORRECT
It can be the chances to save money while they are living rented house and will get opportunity to buy their own house.
>>> It can be a chance to save money while they are living in a rented house and will have an opportunity to buy their own house.
 Tenants don\'t have to care of facility.defects and maintenance because it\'s owner\'s responsibility. 
>>>  Tenants don\'t have to mind about facilities\' defects and maintenance because it\'s the owner\'s responsibility. 
To sum up, there are many advantages living in rental house, I prefer to purchase my own house.
>>> To sum up, there are many advantages living in rental house however, I prefer to purchase my own house.

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