In my opinion, I don't recommend it.

2018-07-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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In my school days, I learn the recorder which is similar to pipe. Music can be a indivisual hobby for indivisuals. Music is funny like the relics of certain song. In my opinion, school education is a bit hard to students generally. Music is can be a rest to those when we have a vacant time. Tnanks for reading. Bye.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

Thank you for sending your homework.

Cheers!
Jean

In my school days, I learn the recorder which is similar to pipe.
>> In my school days, I learned the recorder which is similar to pipe.

Music can be a indivisual hobby for indivisuals.
>> Music can be a hobby that may be done individually.

Music is funny like the relics of certain song.
>> Music is fun like the lyrics of some songs.

In my opinion, school education is a bit hard to students generally.
>> In my opinion, formal education is a bit hard to students generally.

Music is can be a rest to those when we have a vacant time.
>> Music can be a form of entertainment to those who have leisure time.
>> or: Music can be a pastime to those who have free time.

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