In order to improve Korea\'s delivery service!!
학생이 쓴 원문
I already think Korea\'s delivery service is the best in the world.
We can track the route on their way and know who is delivering it.
However, the system is getting develop, some problems happens.
Because Several companies is sharing whole markets, the delivery fee is getting expensive.
And delivery drivers must take a risk for quick delivery.
In order to improve Korea\'s delivery service, I think it is a good way to manage the service from a local government, not a delivery agency by a private company.
And it would be better to have drivers join insurance so that they can deliver it safely.
I hope everyone live safe and happy life.
강사 첨삭
Hi Evan:)
Product delivery services have extended a lot of help to businesses. To put it bluntly, it would be quite impossible to get things from point A to point B without product delivery services, especially now that we’re facing a pandemic. Due to COVID, our movement has been limited to lessen our chances of contracting the virus. It has been very difficult for everyone, and some businesses resorted to closing down because of lack of sustainability and resources to continue. That is why there is the need for improvements.
PS: Yes, there are a lot of accidents happening so these companies should value their riders. :(
I already think Korea\'s delivery service is the best in the world.
>> CORRECT
We can track the route on their way and know who is delivering it.
>> We can track the route they\'re going through and know who is delivering our order.
However, the system is getting develop, some problems happens.
>>However, when the system is getting developed, some problems happens.
Because Several companies is sharing whole markets, the delivery fee is getting expensive.
>> It is because there are several companies sharing the same market which makes the delivery fee more expensive.
And delivery drivers must take a risk for quick delivery.
>> CORRECT
In order to improve Korea\'s delivery service, I think it is a good way to manage the service from a local government, not a delivery agency by a private company.
>> In order to improve Korea\'s delivery service, I think it is a good to manage the service from the local government, not by delivery agencies by private companies.
And it would be better to have drivers join insurance so that they can deliver it safely.
>> And it would be better for drivers to have insurances so that they can deliver safely.
I hope everyone live safe and happy life.
>>I hope everyone will live a safe and happy life.
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