In relation to the virus scare happening around the world, do you think the people who discriminate
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In my opinion, it is not reasonable to discriminate the Chinese citizens because of the COVID-19 virus.
First of all, one cannot tell if a Chinese citizen has visited China recently. If a Chinese citizen hasn\'t been in China for a long time, there is no reason to be avoided. People who discriminate Chinese citizens are judging only by other\'s appearances and making others upset.
Secondly, discriminating other people doesn\'t make the situation better. It will only make the society full of blame and hatred. What we need to do is to keep our hands sanitized, wear masks in public places and be careful when meeting any person.
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Hi Cindy,
My bad, I didn\'t notice that the question for your homework is incomplete, but it\'s good you were able to understand:) Thanks a lot for doing your homework.
-Rachel
In my opinion, it is not reasonable to discriminate the Chinese citizens because of the COVID-19 virus.
>> correct
First of all, one cannot tell if a Chinese citizen has visited China recently.
First of all, one cannot tell if a Chinese citizen has visited China recently.
>> correct (nice structuring and grammar)
If a Chinese citizen hasn\'t been in China for a long time, there is no reason to be avoided.
>> If a Chinese citizen hasn\'t been to China for a long time, there is no reason for that person to be avoided.
People who discriminate Chinese citizens are judging only by other\'s appearances and making others upset.
>> correct (awesome)
Secondly, discriminating other people doesn\'t make the situation better.
Secondly, discriminating other people doesn\'t make the situation better.
>> correct (perfect!)
It will only make the society full of blame and hatred. What we need to do is to keep our hands sanitized, wear masks in public places and be careful when meeting any person.
>> correct (What can I say? You make really good sentences)
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