In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you thi
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Living alone has drawbacks as well as benefits.
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There might be no doubt rapid urbanization has changed our lives in contrast with past.
>> There might be no doubt rapid urbanization has changed our lives in contrast with the past.
Especially, the number of people who live alone is increasing dramatically.
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This change has a beneficial influence on individual life.
>>This change has a beneficial influence on our individual life.
Firstly, people who live alone can spend their time without other family members’ opinions.
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They can do what they want freely, so are likely to be satisfied the quality of life.
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Secondly, people who have much free time can improve their skills.
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In comparison to people who live with family, they do not need to do household chores for long time because there are few household work.
>>In comparison to people who live with family, they do not need to do household chores for a long time because there are few household work.
Therefore, they can develop themselves by studying, challenging diverse field and experiencing new culture.
>>Therefore, they can develop themselves by studying, engaging in a challenging, diverse field and experiencing new culture.
In conclusion, we should acknowledge single-person household and encourage them.
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