In some countries, many teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you agree or disagree
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I disagree with this opinion. Many of countries of teenagers have a job and they are working as part timer. May be some of people think about it is good experience for their future job and preparing of society. However, i do not agree with this idea because there are containing a negative problems. While they work as much as adult, generally they salary is so less. Employer employ teenagers as low pay that. Other problem is teenagers can't concentrate on their study at school. Usually, teenagers spend in their about 50 hours per week at school. They need take rest and some more exciting exercise for improving their physical and mental. It helps to get strong power on body and good mental.
lot teenagers are working in fast food company as low salary on part timer. I do not think this will help their future job and preparing of society to teenagers. The adult should give many good activity that preparing or looking interest for select their future job to teenager.
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Hi there^^
Thank you for doing your homework^^
I made some corrections and I hope I was able to meet all your points.
I agree with you! But some teenagers work because they want to earn money, so they can continue their education. Sometimes. it is also good for them to learn a lot of different things.
Anyway, let\'s talk more about this in our class. Have a great day and take care^^
~T.Chelsea
I disagree with this opinion.
>> CORRECT^^
Many of countries of teenagers have a job and they are working as part timer.
>> In many countries, teenagers have a part time job.
May be some of people think about it is good experience for their future job and preparing of society.
>> Maybe some people think about is as a good experience for their future job and prepating for the society.
However, i do not agree with this idea because there are containing a negative problems.
>> However, I don\'t agree with this idea because it contains negative problems.
While they work as much as adult, generally they salary is so less.
>> While they are working like adults, generally their salary is not enough.
Employer employ teenagers as low pay that.
>> Employers employ teenagers because of low salary.
Other problem is teenagers can\'t concentrate on their study at school.
>> Other problem is that teenagers can\'t concentrate on their studies at school.
Usually, teenagers spend in their about 50 hours per week at school.
>> Usually, teenagers spend their time about 50 hours a week at school.
They need take rest and some more exciting exercise for improving their physical and mental.
>> They need to take a rest and do some exciting exercises to improve their health; physically and mentally.
It helps to get strong power on body and good mental.
>> It helps them be more energetic and have a good thinking.lot teenagers are working in fast food company as low salary on part timer.
>> A lot od teenagers work in a fast food companies with a very low salary as a part time.
I do not think this will help their future job and preparing of society to teenagers.
>> I don\'t think this will help them in their future job and preparing to be teenagers in the society.
The adult should give many good activity that preparing or looking interest for select their future job to teenager.
>> The adults should give many good activities for them to prepare and look for their interests to choose their future job for teenagers.
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