In some countries, many teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you agree or disagree
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From my experience and knowledge, I agree that many teenagers have jobs while they are still students.
Firstly, I have seen many friends had worked before. When I was in Japan, I met lots of friends from different countries: Canada, Philippines, Thailand, America, etc. Most of them had worked when they were students. America is famous for the fact that students begin to work before going to the university; so, I knew already that but I learned that there are many students who had worked since they were early. Plus, almost Japanese friends had worked while they were in high school enough to say a hundred percent.
Secondly, I also had a part time job when I was high school. I did not have enough money to spend hanging out with friends; thus, I had to part time job although working time was short. But, at that time I think that it was better than I did not anything.
Considering two reasons I mentioned, I agree that many teens have jobs while they are students in some countries.
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Happy Friday Miss [이름]!
I agree that if you will train students to work while studying, they will learn the value of hardwork and perseverance. They will grow responsible. Anyway, have a restful weekend!
~Kelly^^
From my experience and knowledge, I agree that many teenagers have jobs while they are still students.
>> Correct.Firstly, I have seen many friends had worked before.
>> Firstly, I have seen many friends that have worked before.
When I was in Japan, I met lots of friends from different countries: Canada, Philippines, Thailand, America, etc.
>> When I was in Japan, I met lots of friends from different countries such as Canada, the Philippines, Thailand, America, etc.
Most of them had worked when they were students.
>> Correct.
America is famous for the fact that students begin to work before going to the university; so, I knew already that but I learned that there are many students who had worked since they were early.
>> America is famous for students who work before going to the university; so, I already knew that, but I learned that there were many students who had worked since they were young.
Plus, almost Japanese friends had worked while they were in high school enough to say a hundred percent.
>> In addition, most of my Japanese friends had worked while they were in high school.Secondly, I also had a part time job when I was high school.
>> Correct.
I did not have enough money to spend hanging out with friends; thus, I had to part time job although working time was short.
>> I did not have enough money to spent when hanging out with friends; thus, I worked for part time.
But, at that time I think that it was better than I did not anything.
>> But, at that time, I think that it was better than doing nothing.Considering two reasons I mentioned, I agree that many teens have jobs while they are students in some countries.
>> Considering the two reasons I mentioned, I agree that many teens should have jobs while they are students in some countries.
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