In some countries the elderly are highly valued and respected, while in others youth is more highly
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Most people think that the elderly should get respected from the young people in Korea. We were educated from parents and teachers about general manner to the elderly. These manner is one of the most important factor when we do socializing and work. So, our society became very conservative that means people tend to push young people whatever seniors would like to do. Juniors even do something that are unreasonable such as personal matters because we think that this is the way to respect the elderly. However, many people especially young people realize that our culture has a lot of problems. General manner in Korea push people to do unwanted things. Our valuable culture need to be adapted to the people with modified way in modern society. In aging world, young people would be important because the population of old people will be increasing dramatically that can be the burden of young generations. The elderly will be supported young people. That\'s why some people insist that youth shoul
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Most people think that the elderly should get respected from the young people in Korea.
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We were educated by our parents and teachers about the general manner.
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These manner is one of the most important factors when we do socializing and work.
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So, our society became very conservative that means people tend to push young people whatever seniors would like them to do.
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Juniors even do something that are unreasonable such as personal matters because we think that this is the way to respect the elderly.
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However, many people especially young people realize that our culture has a lot of problems.
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General manner in Korea pushes people to do unwanted things.
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Our valuable culture need to be adapted to the people with modified way in modern society.
>>> CORRECT
In an aging world, young people would be important because the population of old people will be increasing dramatically which can be the burden of young generations.
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The elderly will be supported by young people.
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That\'s why some people insist that youth should...
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