In the today's class, the line is out of order.
학생이 쓴 원문
In the today's class, the line is out of order.
I can not know what you say.
When you have some problem, you speak more rapidly.
Then I can not understand your speaking at all.
Now, I am reviewing the lessons.
I wanted to say that smoking is all bad and no good.
I expressed that smoking is one hundred bad, no good ^^
I stopped smoking 15 years ago.
In my exprience, his will is the most important thing to stop smoking.
I expressed "will" to "decision" today.
In my case, I had taken the drug to stop smoking.
But it was no use. Only strong will was useful.
Good night.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!!
Congratulations once again for your success in quitting smoking. I think you should encourage more people to stop smoking.
Anyway, about the line yesterday, I don't know what happened and I'm sorry for that but it's fixed now so it will not happen again..
Smoking is never good. It causes deadly diseases and I admire your will to quit smoking. You have done a great favor to yourself.
Take care always.. I'll see you later!
Xoxoxo,
T. Shy
Here are my corrections for you:
In the today's class, the line is out of order.>> In the today's class, the line was bad.
I can not know what you say.>> I can't understand what you were saying.
When you have some problem, you speak more rapidly.>> When you have some problems, you speak rapidly.Then I can not understand your speaking at all.>> Then I can not understand you at all.
I expressed that smoking is one hundred bad, no good ^^>> I mean that smoking is one hundred percent bad and no good ^^
In my exprience, his will is the most important thing to stop smoking.>> In my experience, the will to stop is the most important thing to quit smoking.
I expressed "will" to "decision" today.>> I mean the will to decide today.
In my case, I had taken the drug to stop smoking.>> In my case, I had taken some medications to stop smoking.
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