In this life, what should we relinquish so we can truly be happy?

2014-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

학생이 쓴 원문

We have so many things to relinquish in order to be truly happy in this life. We already know what we should focus on in our life, but we easily forget it. First, we have to relinquish our greedy tendency towards money and any other material things around us. We all know that we have to take a basic income to make our living. However, in our captilized society it seems that materiality including money precede every commonn value like a sense of fellowship and environmental protection which are important for the formation and sustainability of our society. We should bear in mind that we must not obsess the value of what we have in terms of material perspective. Second, we should realize that human beings are basically incomplete. There are so many people who become in trouble when they believe that they should be complete in doing everything that they are responsible for. We should take it granted that we should rely on other people who are interdependent with us.

강사 첨삭

What a wonderful composition! Thank you so much for, somehow, completing my day with a piece of your knowledge. After going over your answer, something hit me. If we want to be happy, what kind of question should we ask ourselves? Is it how we can make ourselves happy or how we can make ourselves worthy of happiness? If I remember it right, I first encountered this notion from one of the materials of the renowned philosopher Immanuel Kant. Worldly pleasures, materiality as you have mentioned here, create and destroy most of our being. We may want to relinquish it but not completely. In my honest opinion, we can never be truly happy without those \"things\" having brought to life having such. Would I be greedy if I say that I want a BIT of this and that? With the word \"BIT\", it already negates the mere essence of greediness. To sum it all, HAPPINESS is really a state of the mind. It can never be measured nor qualified to give us the exact terms for being \"happy\". What is your take on my answer [이름]? How I hope you still have some spare time to read my reply. Are you having a happy afternoon? Always put a smile on your face! _Klein We have so many things to relinquish in order to be truly happy in this life. We already know what we should focus on in our life, but we easily forget it.First, we have to relinquish our greedy tendency towards money and any other material things around us. We all know that we have to take a basic income to make our living. >>Correct! However, in our captilized society it seems that materiality including money precede every commonn value like a sense of fellowship and environmental protection which are important for the formation and sustainability of our society. >>Correct [capitalistic; common] We should bear in mind that we must not obsess the value of what we have in terms of material perspective. >>We should bear in mind that we must not get obsessed with the value of what we have in terms of material perspective.Second, we should realize that human beings are basically incomplete. There are so many people who become in trouble when they believe that they should be complete in doing everything that they are responsible for. >>Correct We should take it granted that we should rely on other people who are interdependent with us. >>Correct OR >> We should not take for granted the fact that we should rely on other people since we are interdependent.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·