In today's world, how are animals suffering? What can we do to make sure animals rights are respecte
학생이 쓴 원문
In our suroundings, many animals are suffering from human or human-made machines.
For example, road kill by moter car and the number of elephants decreasing due to illegal hunting, dolpin imprisoned for show, being provided human with many kinds of animal′s meat, etc.
Life is important anything and everything. everything is worth to exit in the world.
Animals don′t communicate with man by langgage but communicate by eye.
They express fear, horror, pleasure, happiness, pain with eye.
we live forgetting their importance because of non hearing of their voices.
Human belong to natural but owner of this planet.
we don′t forget that we are non-owner of this planet,
and then this planet belong to all creatures in the world.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Mr. [Name]! ^_^
This is a nice composition.
I can safely say that you really care about animals and their rights.
You are absolutely right. We should not hurt them nor kill them.
However, some animals are meant for consumption.
But to display animals for show or entertainment is unforgiveable.
_T. Mayleen :)
In our suroundings, many animals are suffering from human or human-made machines.
>> In our surroundings, many animals are suffereing from man and man-made machineries.For example, road kill by moter car and the number of elephants decreasing due to illegal hunting, dolpin imprisoned for show, being provided human with many kinds of animal′s meat, etc.
>> For example, road kill by a motorcycle; the number of elephants decreasing due to illegal hunting; dolphins captured for shows; other animals for food consumption.Life is important anything and everything. everything is worth to exit in the world.
>> Life is important and everything on earth deserve to exist.Animals don′t communicate with man by langgage but communicate by eye.
>> Animals can\'t communicate by language but they communicate through actions.They express fear, horror, pleasure, happiness, pain with eye.
>> They express fear, pleasure, abd pain through theirs eyes.we live forgetting their importance because of non hearing of their voices.
>> We live forgetting their importance just because they\'re lower being.Human belong to natural but owner of this planet.
>> We don\'t own this planet.we don′t forget that we are non-owner of this planet,
and then this planet belong to all creatures in the world.
>> The planet belongs to all the creatures in it and they should co-exist.
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