In what way has your personality changed? Why has it changed??

2019-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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When I was 20years old, I was full of confident and energy. I had many things which wanted to do and I was very ambitious. In addition, I was very strict to myself. When I was late twenties I changed. I don\'t know why exactly, it was maybe natural reation through getting older. I became little bit calm and to get peace of mind. I like new version of I better than past version.

강사 첨삭

Hello Saki-San! :)

Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a wonderful day. :)

- Tricia

When I was 20years old, I was full of confident and energy.
>> When I was 20 years old, I was full of confident and energy.

I had many things which wanted to do and I was very ambitious.
>> I had a lot of things that I wanted to do and I was very ambitious.

In addition, I was very strict to myself. When I was late twenties I changed.
>> In addition, I was very strict to myself. When I was in my late twenties I started changing.

I don\'t know why exactly, it was maybe natural reation through getting older.
>> I don\'t know the exact reason why, it was maybe my natural reaction about getting older.
 
I became little bit calm and to get peace of mind.
>> I became a little bit calm and have a peace of mind.

I like new version of I better than past version.
>> I like the new version of me than the old one.

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