In what ways are credit cards better than cash?
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There are a couple of circumstances that using credit cards is more efficient than cash. Firstly, it is more convenient that we can check the online statements easily whenever using credit cards. Thus, we can manage our spending habits for saving money by checking the well-organised record. Secondly, nowadays, it is possible that we can pay with our mobile phone. So, it doesn\'t necessary to carry heavy coins and a wallet.
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Thank you for this Aciel!
>>> correct
Firstly, it is more convenient that we can check the online statements easily whenever using credit cards.
>>> OR: Firstly, it is more convenient to check the online statements easily whenever we use the credit cards.
Thus, we can manage our spending habits for saving money by checking the well-organised record.
>>> Thus, we can manage our spending habits of saving money by checking the well-organized record.
Secondly, nowadays, it is possible that we can pay with our mobile phone.
>>> correct
So, it doesn\'t necessary to carry heavy coins and a wallet.
>>> So, it isn\'t necessary to carry heavy coins and a wallet.
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